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This is the first version of a poem about Batman that I wrote for a creative writing class when I was in college.  It is not too bad, but I think we can agree that it needs work.  I will post the improved version shortly.

The Batman

I wait on the fire escape,

The evil of the city is everywhere around me.

Tonight I must stop that evil.

It is hard, because there is so much.

An old lady walks in the alley below.

Evil shadows follow, then attack.

The lady screams.

I make my move, flying from my perch.

The lady runs into the dark.

They feel the odds are in their favor, and close in.

One lunges at me, I kick him against the wall.

Soon they are all on me, kicking and punching me.

I remember what they did to my parents.

A sea of red fills my eyes.

When it fades, the muggers lie at my feet.

Somewhere in the distance a siren sounds.

I vanish into the shadows to continue my fight.

The police are not the only thing the evil must worry about tonight.

 

Jack Hecker
1990

Here is the rewrite.  I think that it is much better than the original.

The Batman – version 2

I wait on the fire escape

The evil of the city is everywhere around me

Its breath crawls across my body

Seeping into my lungs

Trying to corrupt my soul

A bag lady hobbles into view

All she has are the clothes on her back

And a cart full of trinkets she has collected

Evil shadows slither behind

The strike

She lets out a tired scream

She’s been through this before

I make my move

Flying from my perch

They think they have me out numbered

I can’t wait to prove them wrong

A shadow strikes

I kick him against the wall

Ribs splinter

Muscle separates from bone

Consciousness turns to black

They rush me

Are all over me

Kicking, punching

Evil killed my parents

I won’t let it kill me

A sea of red fills my eyes

When it fades

Broken bodies lie about

A distant siren sounds

I vanish into the night

The police are not all

Evil must worry about tonight

 

Jack Hecker

1990

Note:  The character of Batman belongs to DC Comics.

It has been a while since I have posted anything here.  I am just not sure what to post about. 

I started this blog as a means of sharing my technical knowledge and writing about things that were important to me, but I almost always ended up posting about something that really pissed me off instead.  So going forward I am going to try to get this back on track, or at least away from things that piss me off. 

While moving my office, I ran across some old writings I did in college.  In the coming weeks, I plan to share those here as I digitize them.  Some are from a creative writing class where I had to write short stories and poetry.  Should be interesting.

Stay tuned....

My wife, Jill has finally got her own blog.  She had me set it up so that she could have a place to write extended feedback on ebay users, since the 40 or so characters they give you is never enough to answer some of the wacky crap some users pull, but I think she is going to end up using it for other stuff too. :)