This is the first version of a poem about Batman that I wrote for a creative writing class when I was in college. It is not too bad, but I think we can agree that it needs work. I will post the improved version shortly.
The Batman
I wait on the fire escape,
The evil of the city is everywhere around me.
Tonight I must stop that evil.
It is hard, because there is so much.
An old lady walks in the alley below.
Evil shadows follow, then attack.
The lady screams.
I make my move, flying from my perch.
The lady runs into the dark.
They feel the odds are in their favor, and close in.
One lunges at me, I kick him against the wall.
Soon they are all on me, kicking and punching me.
I remember what they did to my parents.
A sea of red fills my eyes.
When it fades, the muggers lie at my feet.
Somewhere in the distance a siren sounds.
I vanish into the shadows to continue my fight.
The police are not the only thing the evil must worry about tonight.
Jack Hecker
1990
Here is the rewrite. I think that it is much better than the original.
The Batman – version 2
I wait on the fire escape
The evil of the city is everywhere around me
Its breath crawls across my body
Seeping into my lungs
Trying to corrupt my soul
A bag lady hobbles into view
All she has are the clothes on her back
And a cart full of trinkets she has collected
Evil shadows slither behind
The strike
She lets out a tired scream
She’s been through this before
I make my move
Flying from my perch
They think they have me out numbered
I can’t wait to prove them wrong
A shadow strikes
I kick him against the wall
Ribs splinter
Muscle separates from bone
Consciousness turns to black
They rush me
Are all over me
Kicking, punching
Evil killed my parents
I won’t let it kill me
A sea of red fills my eyes
When it fades
Broken bodies lie about
A distant siren sounds
I vanish into the night
The police are not all
Evil must worry about tonight
Jack Hecker
1990
Note: The character of Batman belongs to DC Comics.